I tried translating and editing for the first time.
I voluntarily left out the hand written text bubbles because I don't know yet how to translate them in a clean way, and there are tons of other editing things that could be done way better, so i'll try to learn for a possible next time.
There probably are grammatical mistakes and I'm lacking when it comes to natural sounding English, so please don't hesitate to point out mistakes / weird structure sentences / choices of words.
Anyway, hope you can enjoy the read nonetheless !

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Unfortunately Kairakuten is Wani property/Fakku licensed so prepare yourself for a potential takedown.

In general for the future: X-Eros, Kairakuten (+Weekly & BEAST), BAVEL, Shitsurakuten, and Isekairakuten are under this umbrella which is why scanlators usually steer clear of them.

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On the other hand, it won't get get taken down from everywhere and I doubt Fakku translates everything from Kairakuten, so that doesn't necessarily mean it wasn't worth doing. Thanks for the translation!

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Already read this uncensored

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@BonjoHiggins Oh yeah it totally slipped out of my mind, I was wondering why this author wasn't translated but I didn't make the connection haha ! At least now I'm aware, thanks for the advice and the list of licensed comics.

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Add a stroke to text that isn't on a plain background so it's legible. 2-4px of white is usually good. You can map the stroke action to a keyboard shortcut in PS.
There isn't a space between the last letter of a sentence and its punctuation. It's also generally not a good idea to give a single ! or ? its own line.
CAF isn't always enough. Going over the weird bits with the clone brush can improve the look a lot without too much effort for simple redraws.

The lack of strokes is a major flaw, but other than that it's not a bad first attempt at all. Pretty easy thing to fix too if you want this to be archived elsewhere.

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@Boomer30569 Thanks a lot for your detailed feedback, I greatly appreciate it ! That's really helpful, I'll try and fiddle around with what you recommended.
Also thanks for pointing out the punctuation, the rules in my language are not the same than in English and I had forgotten.

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