I only read the first page but fyi

OG: 本日は専門家の方がお越しくださりました
TL: "We have invited an expert to join us here in Japan"
ED: 日本 is Japan, 本日 is "today"

e: aside from all the untranslated interjections, you're using wrong definitions for several terms here and there

003
OG: ほんとにやらなきゃダメですか…
TL: "I don't really have a choice..."
ED: this is the girl asking if she really has to do it

OG: 種付けおじさんの活躍は目覚ましく施行前と比べると
TL: "The Breeding Studs have shown outstanding increases in activity"
ED: "outstanding increases in activity" should be like "successful"

004
OG: また
TL: "Still"
ED: should be more like "also" (this is different from the student council president saying it later)

OG: いやあ
TL: No!
ED: this is like a surprised "well,"

OG: 続いてのニュースです
TL: "Until next time, This has been 'Up Next News'"
ED: she's just moving on to the next news story but you're making it sound like there's a name for the program

007
OG: …ああ
TL: "Uhh..."
ED: this is an affirmative

OG: 聖蓮はこういうことが無いからって
TL: "They can't suddenly send someone just because Saint Lotus Academy doesn't have a Breeding Stud yet"
ED: she's saying her dad told her this kind of thing wouldn't happen. also "Saint Lotus" over "Holy Lotus"?

OG: ふい～… / やっと着きました
TL: "I" / "*ahem* have arrived"
ED: he's not clearing his throat, the first part is an exhale like "whew", and then he says he finally made it

008
OG: 種付けおじさんの種谷と言います♡
TL: "My name is Tanaya I will be your Breeding Stud"
ED: his name is Taneya

015
OG: 十分に濡れたかな？
TL: "You're pretty wet"
ED: he's wondering if she's wet enough

017
OG: あっ
TL: N/A
ED: empty bubble

Last edited on 10 March 2023, 08:40.

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what if schools were run by the catholic church

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This is cool and all in hentai land but wouldn't people in the real world just go to sperm banks and artificial insemination

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Lol I love the big sister's ecstatic expression at the end.

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What a stud.

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Teachers are more of a threat to children than the catholic church. Just sayin'.

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