Shojo Ane - My Virgin Sister
artist: Grassturtle
translation & edit: KeizerD
comissions : [email protected]

You used the wrong 1280x downsized resolution of the images. Originals are 1342 x 1900. Download the archive or the non-downsized torrent.

I'm nitpicky, so here. I feel like you take liberties when maybe there's no need to. Here's a few examples:

p.5 Your breakfast's getting cold > she's just mentioning that it's ready (already).
p.6 Stop joking around and get ready! > maybe missing the "stop joking around... by saying weird crap/talking nonsense"
p.8 What are you doing? It's embarrassing > Don't do this [kind of thing] in public!
p.10 What's the matter, sis? > You're all flushed!

Like yeah, okay. Some of these liberties are consistent with the original intent, but they also seem unneeded at times. A lot of this dialogue is extremely straightforward already. But it's pretty nitpicky. I'd see myself take some of these liberties too.

More general comments:

You're missing punctuation, especially commas.
Some typos.

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@cutegyaru I see what you mean; I'll definitely do a revision and edit the mistakes out.
I appreciate the feedback. Thank you.

Last edited on 17 March 2023, 18:11.

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idk about everyone else but i think the sister's cute. and i don't mean her appearance.

anyway, @KeizerD:
looking at how you write your response i'd suggest you try using spellcheckers. i mean even your response have a typo there. or maybe just try typing slower so you can see mistakes earlier.
other than that, thanks for the hard work!

Last edited on 17 March 2023, 22:07.

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@ncc1701z Thank you for the comment. I'm halfway through correcting all the mistakes and the image resolution. I'll post the updated version as soon as it's done.

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she's very gullible, gets told he loves her and she gives in and fucks him

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