I don't want to sound like an ass, but this should have had some quality control before you posted it.

Base +9, procrastinator0109 +6, red death68 +6, huesun +6

Kindly never upload again. I did not upload the raw for you to scribble nonsense on it :)

Base +5, Lin84210 +11, Danjian +6, sitora +6, Grimmy32 +11, Leonidas23 +8, LordKronos +6, red death68 +6, huesun +6, scyph +6

03: *sigh* => *pant* (?)
04: I didn't know [...] felt => I didn't know [...] feels / could feel
04: Masturbating today Which toy should i use? => Which toy should i use for masturbating today?
04: you/we => (wrong subject) / i
04: your => (wrong subject) / my
06: Rotor? => A rotor?
06: We [...] Like a gentleman => (incoherent) / We [...] Like gentlemen
07: He's leaving => (incoherent) / We're leaving (?)
07: what he wanted => what i wanted (?)
08: her name => your name (?)
08: As Ami requested, we'll => As Ami/you requested, you'll
08: your ass digging into my panties => (incoherent) / your ass digging into your panties
08: go easy on him. He's lifting himself => (wrong gender) / go easy on her. She's lifting herself
08: pie bread => (nonsense)
09: This guy => This girl
09: This guy's already in my pussy => (wrong subject) / (wrong person)
10: for a freak like me => (incoherent)
10: filled with dildos => filled with the dildo
And so on, plus many hyphenations errors...

Base +8, cutegyaru +23, Leonidas23 +8, NekoDaemon +1

002
OG: はあ / はあ
TL: "*sigh*" / "*sigh*"
ED: this is panting

003
OG: 誰も来ない公園の男子トイレでオナニーするようになってもう結構経つわ…
TL: "It's been a long time since I started masturbating in the park"
ED: missing detail, masturbating in the men's bathroom at a deserted park

OG: 通販で買ったオモチャの音も気にせず使えるし
TL: "You can use the toy I bought online without worrying about it"
ED: she's talking to herself, and she's referring to worrying about being too loud

OG: ほんとここ一人エッチに最適よね♥
TL: "This really is the best place for one person to have sex"
ED: masturbate

OG: 今日はもう中は刺激してるし…
TL: "I've already stimulated your insides today"
ED: she's talking about herself

004
OG: このローターしよう！
TL: "Let's go with this rotor!"
ED: vibrator

OG: あ♥
TL: N/A

005
OG: え…
TL: N/A
ED: erased bubble

006
OG: おいおいもしかしてさっきの噂話マジなのか！？
TL: "Are you serious about that gossiping?"
ED: he's wondering if that rumor was true

007
OG: 帰っちまうぞ！
TL: "He's leaving!"
ED: he's talking about himself

OG: わ…私のお相手してくれますか…？
TL: "I'm your partner." / "Will you do it for me?"
ED: she's asking if they would be her partners

OG: 私は / こうなる事を望んでいたのかもしれない…♥
TL: "Maybe this is what he wanted"
ED: she's talking about herself
etc

Base +32, cutegyaru +23, Leonidas23 +8