Same comment here. Beyond the grammar and machine translation you also used the wrong 1280x downsized resolution and your typesetting is questionable to say the least.

p.1 you're delivery
p.4 we are lucky we had you > clearly still have him, so tense should be present
p.5 i'm in a bit of a trouble
p.5 underwears
p.8 your pants would get dirty > will
p.11 recognied
p.11 you're nipples
p.11 it's manners after all > it's only polite, after all./it's proper manners
p.12 you're nipples
p.13 miutes
p.13 anyone has any questions > does anyone have
p.16 urusai, baka > not english
p.17 president
p.21 it came out, it came... and in such a place... > the ESL wording makes this pretty hard to understand
p.23 you're other
p.24 isn't she? > doesn't she?
p.25 its moving
p.25 and let this end > and end this/put an end to this. passive form here makes no sense.
p.28 there is nothing wrong with them being touched > referring to a singular clitoris, so "it"
p.29 from all your chest, pussy and ass that is > "all your" implies trying to quantify something. "You're feeling it all over your body."
p.30 assjust
p.31 this has to be a lie > you have to be kidding

etc

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Why even mention a boyfriend? Just to half assed tack on the cheating tag?

In this kind of society, the concept of a "boyfriend" wouldnt exist.

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She had one scene with her boyfriend and the others were watching through Zoom
So yeah, it is important. Most likely boyfriend is too aware of the situation and don't mind it.

Last edited on 10 August 2023, 15:52.

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That's good

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