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nice rape, based.

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02/03 : You reused the pages from the first chapter. The second chapter has a different color tone.
- Ch1 (ENG): /g/2627905/fbe795acac/
- Ch2 (RAW): /g/2652185/1a784017b4/

02: (same mistakes as last time)
05: see you get drunk
=> (participle needed here) / see you getting drunk / see you gotten drunk
=> (state rather?) / see you drunk
12: this is crime => (article needed) / this is a crime
12: If if feels => If it feels
12: alrigh => alright
15: you're stop resisting
=> (not an adverb, present continuous needs a participle) / you're stopping to resist / you're stopping your resistance
=> (if not ongoing, use present perfect instead) / you've stopped resisting
15: I cum
=> (if current, prefer present continuous) / I'm cumming
=> (if done, prefer past) / I came

Last edited on 25 August 2023, 05:59.

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Part 1 (Chisato): 🟢 RAW 🟢 ENG

https://noil-poisoncat.fanbox.cc/posts/6445184

Part 2 (Takina): 🟢 RAW 🔵 ENG

https://noil-poisoncat.fanbox.cc/posts/6565181

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