The translation is kinda whack

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Great art, but sadly it's mosaic :(

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https://www.pixiv.net/artworks/110526021
https://www.dmm.co.jp/dc/doujin/-/detail/=/cid=d_284858/
https://www.melonbooks.co.jp/detail/detail.php?product_id=2034917
https://ec.toranoana.jp/tora_r/ec/item/040031087866

Raw: /g/2666646/32f3d65d42/
Chinese: /g/2668319/a4f71a95b5/

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There really needs to be an "Engrish" tag.

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you need a proofreader...

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This has to be MTL

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07/51: only the king who can give permission
- why the pronoun? => only the king can give permission
08: a common sense
- uncountable in this meaning => common sense
09: why everyone nake(d)...
- missing verb => why is everyone nake(d)...
09: everyone already done
- missing verb => everyone is already done
10: they don't come here
- wrong location? => they don't come there
13: few days
- article needed => a few days
13: Come to think of it, saints enhance their power by sucking male genitals.
- bad typesetting, hardly readable
19: No need to hide it. Is that so? But you
- incoherent => Is that so? No need to hit it. You
19: you looks
- second person => you look
27: my personal slave [...] all her bodies
- inconsistent number => my personal slave [...] all her body / my personal slave [...] her whole body
28: something strange
- missing verb => something's strange
32: are pumping [...] and messed
- inconsistent tense => are pumping [...] and messing
33/34: untranslated dialogues
35: your subordinate was
- incoherent number? => your subordinates were
40: those defenseless body
- inconsistent number => that defenseless body
40: to messed up
- infinitive => to mess up
40: those body
- inconsistent number => that body
41: mens => men
43: that your being as [...]
- missing verb / extraneous clause => you being [...]
43: i'll proof it
- wrong meaning => i'll prove it
48: Is it?
- incoherent, breaks the current dialogue
51: few months
- article needed => a few months
56: importart => important
56: TL-ed with Google Translate
- shame on you

Last edited on 06 October 2023, 21:25.

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