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Base +9, Alphasekai +6, Dooderz -8

yoooo never thought I'd see the day!

Base +6

rough grammar

overall: weird cleaning on the black bubbles like on p.3. weird phrasing (you're trying to stick to Japanese phrases and grammatical structures too much).

p.4 langeries
p.4 and then slam and thrust her slim > into her
p.5 I'll have this uncle dick > ??
p.5 is filthy
p.5 sensible > sensitive
p.5 it makes want
p.6 is completely natural
p.6 a faint vaginal and anal scent > 2 diff scents. should be plural
p.7 recived
p.7 recieve

There's more than these.

Tip: write your script out in Google Doc or something and use the spellcheck function.

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"Sorry for intruding on your family tree!" Damn. That's a new one. I like it.

Base +6, Hismoot +4, ADIN0 +7

neat someone finally translated this much appreciated edit: i also dont think he ever did the miho book or maybe like some of his other stuff that those bastards areguarding we never got to see the raws in the light of day so no source.

Last edited on 09 September 2024, 19:58.

Base +7, ADIN0 +7