What's this? A rewrite that actually isn't terrible? I wish more of them were like this.

Also, raw: /s/7918507d1b/66259-58

Base +6, Mageta -9, yuriyuri319 +5, wanderer9 -3, reggieob -9, tentacle-man61 -24, HiroKazuya +6, kiwino -12, baneonplane +8

Those that have voted this rewrite one star are capitalist swines who cannot comprehend our communist ideals!

Base +1, Mageta -9, yuriyuri319 +5, wanderer9 -3, reggieob -9, Dark Mac +7, mickey711 +8, tentacle-man61 -24, skyxxzc +6, encounter +6, malsi -5, m42a +16, JorgOfAncrath -4, and 3 more...

Hilarious! A work of comic genius!

Base +7, yuriyuri319 +5, tentacle-man61 -24, Canavi -14, kiwino -12, baneonplane +8

"sperm noise!" "orgasm noise" "ejaculation noise!" "additional ejaculation noise!" "pubic hair noise!" "wisdom noise!"

Base +7, tentacle-man61 +24, Canavi -14, pedrick440 +3, S0RCERER +15, baneonplane +8

Good job, great translation, hopefully you can translate other works by this artist

Base +8, kiwino -12, Vivi1993 -19, lttcyber -30, Dyjin -27, buttobicpu -30