>I have this photoshopped image of your boy smoking

Translator: Comoop
Editor: JnTo
Rough Q-C: JnTo + lots of guys having their say about the translation being a bit weak. Might correct the gallery later if some kind soul would go through a complete Translation Q-Check.

Hope it's good enough for most of you, even though it's not really the result I hoped for.

.PSD Files + Fonts used, if you want to do whatever you want with it (you're free to do whatever you want): https://mega.nz/file/EIpAgaDb#mB-SMH5WWQwezY45-ABhaTP6tOcAPBV21_e7Axt-Ero

pretty much bog standard NTR, you'll definitely get a huge sense of deja vu.

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might as well read greatmosu's work

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I guess props to this one cause she actually dares to break up with him at the end.

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The artwork is good, but for me the plot is too stereotypical to make it exciting. Just my opinion, though.

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I give 5 stars for those delicious open legs on the cover.

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@pleomaxx @Forgunia I agree. I also wonder why do these general NTR always have a scene that foreshadows the original couple's problem or incompatibility. Guess they want to justify the cheating no matter how shallow the reason is? I've only seen few that depicts a perfect couple that's torn apart by an unique set of circumstances. Also who holds a cigarette like in the photoshopped picture? Usually they hold it near the end not the tip to avoid burning.

If you wanna read NTR with a little more depth and humour. I'd suggest Surumenium (Taniguchi Daisuke). There are others but this one is on top of my head.

Most of his NTR are have some funny dialogue or situations/set-ups. And the standard one we get to see a bit of the bf's negligence that led to his girl being stolen, not much but I find it more reasonable than the absurd and drastic jump in process that these stories have.

Unfortunately, I can't find any of the doujin I am talking about here on e-hentai anymore.

The cover is exactly why I am here, the art is really good.

@motaku she sure does. @looder it's bitter and the smell is awful aswell.

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Why doesn't the bully just show the photo to the school and get the cuck expelled at the end? The bully already got the girl already, no need to keep his word.

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She really wanted that ribbon huh.

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Beware! smokin' not only cause cancer but girlfriend being NTR too.

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copypasting again since it's unchanged except for the credits

translation aside, I'm not sure how much I'd rely on those scripts. I skimmed over a few on that server and even the transcriptions aren't entirely accurate either

at the very least you can definitely tell they're not being transcribed by hand. if they ARE being transcribed by hand, then they're not being transcribed with human eyes. anyway I'd be careful with them

ok I checked out the scripts again and I guess you're just ignoring the "DISCLAMER" that they can't "garantee 100% accuracy" and that the "OCR tools" they use "aren't perfect". so I guess my assumptions were correct

003
OG: このラバストって『神秘』のタブーマキナだよね！？
TL: "Is it the mystical taboumakina!?"
ED: this smells like MTL. you can't combine a translation of the game's title with the name of the girl on her phone strap. "Taboumakina"/Taboo Machina is also kind of a lazy TL imo but yeah

OG: 世界を滅ぼした神からアンドロイドの少女を秘してストーリーを進めるアクションＲＰＧがシステムとしても物語としても新鮮でそのアンドロイドの少女が世界中を観測し記録し世界の再構築を図ることを目的としているんだけど廃墟感のある世界がとても美しいんだよね僕の予想ではタブーマキナが再構築の時に消滅してしまわないか心配でさー
TL: "The story centers on an android girl who, while hiding from a god responsible for world destruction, aims to observe and document the world's remnants for rebuilding. Despite the world's ruin, its beauty is striking, and there's a looming possibility that Taboumakina might vanish during the rebuilding."
ED: left out parts of his description of the game and completely left out his own takes

008
OG: 初エッチの極意
TL: N/A
ED: title got merged into the text underneath

OG: 雰囲気づくりが大事！とにかく彼女を褒めて気持ちを盛り上げましょう。
TL: "The secret of first-time sex is to create the right atmosphere! Just praise her and make her feel good."
ED: the translation changes when the title isn't combined with the text

OG: みっ美鈴ちゃんはそのままでも十分可愛いよっ
TL: "Mirei's cuteness is more than enough!"
ED: doesn't make sense as a response to her question

OG: 私なんかがおしゃれなんてね…
TL: "I'm the one who's dressed up..."
ED: she's ridiculing herself. the TL doesn't make sense either since they're both in uniform

OG: 入れるよ
TL: "Let's go inside."
ED: I get he's a virgin but you need to take another crack at this unless you think he's talking to his dick

023
OG: ほら出るよ
TL: "Come on, pick up."
ED: this is not an imperative

025
OG: 美鈴ちゃん…
TL: Mirei-san?
ED: you removed honorifics everywhere else but it's wrong here

030
OG: あれ…遅れてるのかな？
TL: "Oh...is she late?"
ED: he's not asking if she's late

OG: 私は嫌々…えっちをしている
TL: "I don't want to...have sex with him."
ED: this is ambiguous to say the least. she reluctantly had sex behind Yuto's back

overlapping text p35 btw

037
OG: 自分で好きなように動いてみろよ
TL: "He probably just satisfies his own needs."
ED: completely made up

040
OG: 口元がおるすだー
TL: "Your mouth seems off somehow..."
ED: he's talking about the mouth's being neglected

043
OG: そのままイき狂えっ！
TL: "You're cumming like a sex-crazed bitch!"
ED: this is an imperative

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The girl is just too plain and unremarkable to care about the NTR part

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Missing this page: /s/a78e15053a/2807808-46

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boring as fuck

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