So many filler words and/or grammar mistakes, unbearable to read. Everyday speech does not sound good on paper.
P.S. What was the reason to change female model so drastically after surgery? All of that gradual buildup is completely wasted.

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Just so everyone is aware of what this is, Keshara is a creator that had created a long and large series of stories that all take place in the same universe. We're talking like 20~30 installments with 200-1000 pages each. The first comment on the page below lists most of them in chronological order which seems to be taken from a post made by Keshara directly on another site:

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This could be extremely confusing since each installment isn't just one story focusing on one character but multiple overlapping stories with many different characters, jumping around between all of them. There could be one story you were following only to have a 100+ page diversion into multiple other story lines. Then once the original one picked up it could feel disjointed or even have drastic art model shifts. A few years ago someone (no idea who) seemed to take it upon themselves to go through some of Keshara's stories and try to rip out and stitch together segments involving a specific character and this appears to be one of them. A handful of the other attempts are also on the site. Just to provide a quick example, some of these pages appear to come from Keshara'a "Tales of the Butterfly Salon 3 - Mayoress" and "TotBS3 - Secretary" as shown below:

JS 1-3 = TotBS3-M 436-438
JS 4 = TotBS3-M 441
JS 5-8 = TotBS3-M 458-461
JS 9-42 = TotBS3-M 495-528
JS 43-54 = TotBS3-M 530-541
JS 55-86 = TotBS3-S 2-33
JS 87-206 = TotBS3-S 40-159
JS 207-217 = TotBS3-S 165-175
JS 218-251 = TotBS3-S 275-308

I haven't bothered to check every single page but this should give you some context why reading this might feel weird and disjointed at times.

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