TOKIWA MIDORI PEAK 8.9/10

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There's two VERY BIG reasons that tell me Misaki is a really popular streamer, even among those unfamiliar with gunpla. :P

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Tokiwa Midori is god, thanks for the TL m(_ _)m

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Known machine translator. Tagging.

In case proof is needed: /s/f786a4e9dd/2800110-150

@OP

Please uncheck the box next time, thanks.

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^ Known dickrider. Glazing

In case proof is needed: /g/2672774/806da06366/

@OP

Please uncheck my semen down your throat next time, thanks.

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Oh shit, this finally got transla-
>rough translation tag
>known MTL uploader
REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE. There has GOT to be a better way of policing this shit...

At least you (apparently) learned to use original res raws, since it looks like you used one of the tanks; the raws from COMIC ExE are slightly larger (but don't have the backstory pages).

For the rough grammar tag:
page 2: she's horned up -> this is apparently Australian slang for horny, which probably would've worked better here, horned up feels clunky
page 3: I can't just leave it to be! -> 'leave it be'. Again, clunkiness.
page 5: Thrust me as much as you like -> 'thrust into me as much as you like' or 'thrust as much as you like'
page 6: it's best for you to make it as conspicuous -> 'it's best for you to make it as conspicuous as possible'
page 7: if the regulars saw this, they'd be in fumes! -> 'if the regulars saw this, they'd be fuming'
page 9: review on this during business hours -> 'review this during business hours'
page 12: Welcome in -> 'Welcome, come in' or just 'Welcome'. Clunkiness.
page 12 (cont.): I'm just doing part time -> 'I'm just a part timer'
page 13: because not just the big tittied beauts -> should be a comma after beauts; practically the whole translation is missing periods and commas if I'm being honest
page 16: and that I might've gotten a little too comfortable -> 'and I think that I might've gotten a little too comfortable' would work better here, but if she doesn't explicitly say 'I think' then fine.
etc.

The whole 'translation' feels like it was done by an Australian, which would be fine...if it wasn't MTL.

Also, this doesn't qualify for the harem tag: definition says it has to be at least 3 partners to qualify, and there are only two here. It should be removed.

Last edited on 28 May 2024, 12:55.

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Posting another comment because I'm slow af at noticing things.

Was overjoyed when I saw this translated but while reading I was having some trouble, then I notice it's got the "rough translation" tag and comments mention it's a MTL. :(

Joke is on me for falling for it, sure it IS readable but one can tell the dialogue doesn't flow that well.

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pihip: like cutegyaru said, this was posted by a known MTL uploader, and it's tagged as it is for that reason. To your first comment, IIRC Misaki is loosely based on an actual gravure idol who does Gunpla streams in bikinis; don't remember the name though.

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