002
OG: 何だそんな事か軽く検査してから処分してやろう…
TL: Hmmm.. I'll dispose of thse after giving them a light inspection...
ED: the first line is her being surprise at the violation being better than expected

003
OG: どうでした？ひどいものでしょう…？
TL: Have you finished the disposal of those books yet?
ED: she's asking about how terrible the books are

004
OG: …なんだ…わかってるじゃないか…
TL: Anything...I got it. Lets[sic] do it then.
ED: she's asking if the other girl understands

OG: おまんこを貸してくれたらすべて許してつかわそう！！
TL: HAVE SEX WITH ME. Lend me your body and I'll consider forgiving you.
ED: she'll forgive the other girl if she lets her use her pussy

OG: おまんこ？
TL: おまんこ = Sex
ED: pussy (related to next few pages)

005
OG: 女の子どうしは風紀が乱れるうちには入らないそういう事にしよう…ッ！？
TL: This is a good opportunity for us girls to get to know each other...
ED: she's saying it's not a public morals issue if it's between girls

OG: …ぼ…く…おまンこ♡ついてな…
TL: I haven't...had sex before
ED: she's saying she doesn't have a pussy

OG: うるさい！！だまって私のおちんぽシゴけッ♥！！！
TL: YOU'RE BEING LOUD SHUT UP!!! YOU'RE JUST MASTURBATION MATERIAL FOR MY DICK!
ED: she's telling her to stroke

006
OG: かわいそうに男子みたいなお乳をしてるじゃないか…
TL: Poor thing...You have such a boy-like chest...Let's breastfeed you, help these lewd tits of yours get bigger okay?
ED: the second half of this is made up

007
OG: おせいし…？
TL: N/A

OG: ちくびを吸われた程度で情けない…
TL: I didn't think you would love having your nipples sucked like that...
ED: she's calling her pathetic

OG: オマエがイき散らかしてどうするんだ…っ
TL: Sorry...I think I went overboard, those books really got to me...
ED: she's asking what they're gonna do about the mess she made

OG: わたしの極太勃起ちんぽを処理してもらわないと困るっていう…
TL: Sorry for the inconvenience, but can you go ahead and handle the disposal those books[sic]? I don't think..I could...
ED: she's talking about her erection

OG: …のに…
TL: ...Huh?
ED: this is part of the previous line

and the rewrites seem to get heavier from this point on

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You'll probably get some shit for it but honestly, far from the worst job for a first translation. Rewriting parts isn't the worst thing provided you capture the spirit of the writing, since a lot of one-off hentai doujins don't put a huge amount of nuance into what accompanies their art...But Nyorubee is one of those kind of authors who in fact do a lot of linguistic fuckery, so this was probably a bad choice of first project to choose.

There's a lot of prose and grammar inconsistency that's bad, but I'm sure you'll get better.

The typesetting also leaves a lot to be desired; I'd recommend looking up "Anime Ace" and similar fonts. Conventional book fonts end up looking off-putting and amateur.

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This is way easier to follow than the artist's usual stuff

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Not bad for a first timer! You just need to really improve your typesetting. Use the Anime Ace font and make your text fill up the whole bubble. If you have trouble with that, use a thesaurus or split the words with a hyphen.

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Oh my poggy-woggies, it actually got translated! ♥

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I came 7 times reading this and another time just now this is a masterpiece.

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Futa Iinchou: "Oh no! I'll be exposed as a futanari and having been fooled by my trap subordinate! Whatever will I do?! OH! I know! RAPE!"

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But is it even rape? The poor boy doesn't start with an enthusiastic consent because he too has a secret, but aside of that he seems like he would yield to anything and anybody. And there are *hearts* in the dialogs later on.

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This is a fucking masterpiece.

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