Make it canon. NOW.

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Great, saved from the MTL retards.

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Not decensored.

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Page 15 isekaied my boner.

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Nice to see a better translation, but honestly the story itself is still kinda garbage, now it's just easier to read. Hooray?

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I think the main issue is that the artist tried to put every single girl in one doujinshi, i mean, maybe one doujinshi per girl might be too much work but at least make it so there are a max of 2 or 3 girls each, that would help a lot.
Take for example Aisha, in both this and the previous doujinshi she only got a single page and had to share it with another person. Personally i wish Aisha had more love in the doujinshi community, she deserved more pages and more doujinshis imo, just make one where Rudy falls for her seduction...
Well, either way it's good to see more Mushoku Tensei doujinshis out here, the series is so popular and yet there are too few doujinshis of it out there, its a bit sad.

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God fucking damnit. Why is there scat....

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Scat is for the refined gentleman.

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