Hello,

This is my first comic, feel free to give me your opinion on it ! Please, don't be too harsh but if I have to stop here, let me know.

Thanks for reading me

I kinda like it, but yes, you do need to work on the language some more. Personally I'm on e-hentai for... ...hentai, so, I'd be happy to see some porn in the next chapter. :)
And I wouldn't mind if her chest grew a couple of sizes, but that's just my preference.

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I like it so far. English could certainly improve, but it's readable. Pace of the story seems fine so far. I don't like stories that jump into the porn right away. In fact, I find erotic stories more arousing than outright porn. But that's just me. Good work so far!

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Thank you guys for your feedback. As you took time to write it, I will take time to answer, that's the least I can do.

Carrl, I know the first part is not a hentai as we have only one picture with nudity. But I prefer having context in erotism and not raw porn. This was an error that should be corrected in part 2.
I have to confess, I have the same tastes as you. This won't exactly be the fate of the character, but something different. If I continue this comic, I promise you this will be the case for other characters. It just may take some time.

Wind-pet, I used more tools for part 2 and I'm still seeking for solutions to improve my english writing. Hope you will be able to read me without wincing in the future. I want to say, scholar english is way different that erotic comic english haha.

Thank you so much for your support, the second part is coming very soon.

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