After the events of Live lewd, dwell evil. Black Canary and Jessica Cruz have been acting weird. And it's Dove who decide to dig into this strange behavior. Following them without knowing what's in store for her.
I'm interested in seeing where this is going. I think that you can do some really interesting story just try to learn from past comics. Also be a bit more aware of errors like the backward speech. A trick to help with that is do an editor note for translation for easier read but also helps you notice things might not line up.
I don't know how it is possible to fail so bad at Zatanna's backwards speech. I don't think I could have done that if I tried. I mean only the first word is backwards and then it is just "normal" speak, if you can call the phrase "dwell evil" normal.
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Wait mind control? Isn't that a completey new concept here? I mean, wow! Next thing you are telling me that some kind of demonic parasitical entity is going to corrupt them!
These need to be longer, I know BP can do good sex scenes, but these are just aren't really showing anything other than brief flashes of scenes. I feel as if this whole 'chapter' was a preview for something else. I like the corruption, but draw it out a little like what was done with The Allowance. I mean at least have Canary and Jessica take Dove and start the corruption for a few scenes before Zatanna even shows up. This could last for a week or more, where Dove can't recall what happens, but is finding little clues. Weird taste in her mouth, sore body, feeling utterly sexy at weird times during a fight. The ideas are endless.