A young and rather naive Alien woman ends up on Earth. Unbeknownst even to her she carries within her a potentially deadly and world destroying secret.

What the fuck!? Is this Dragon Ball Z when Goku is fighting Frieza!? Get the fuck on with it, don't spend entire screens with the characters going, "uh... ummm... well.....". You have this girl naked on the bed and what does the guy say? "can we talk first?" This isn't writing.com and if it is, you suck. Just shorten it, it's sixteen parts of this bullshit.

Base +9

@ Zoloe: If you don't like it don't read it.

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