Overall, very confusing story for something so short. Feels really disjointed and he text is horrendous; it's like they stretched out the worst sans-serif font they could find in some second rate knockoff of Photoshop/Illustrator. Art has promise, if not a bit rough, though of course my boner is instantly killed off with the dickgirl shit. Why the fuck is this still a problem? Who the fuck jerks off to this shit? Fuck Futanari! Fuck Herm shit! I mean, I love furries but I'm so fucking tired of dickgirls or anything of that sort.
I do agree on the text. The art is fairly good, I don't find the story confusing, but that first text bubble is just ghastly. Thankfully it gets a lot better by the third page. I'm also not crazy about the iridescent organs a lot of artists seem to like giving their characters, but that's just me. It seems odd and a bit off putting.