Re-edit based off of CGRascal's translation (/g/577553/73082b944e/). Corrected the grammatical errors and improved the typesetting. Slightly changed around the Dialogue to make it flow better.

Typesetting by Anonymous. Let me know what you think and i'll do the rest if you want.

I love how all the fags see rewrite and automatically give it one star.
I gave it 5 just for that reason.

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Blow me assholes

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Who the fuck writes rewrite when the work is already translated?

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Thanks to your work and people like you the anime scene keeps on thriving in spite of being relatively niche. Thank you for your work and please don't be discouraged by the prejudices of a few idiots with nothing better to do but spreading their ignorance like some kind of noxious oil film over everything they touch.
TL;DR: Haters gonna hate; keep on trucking.

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@Biladsan

Who the fuck lurks ex all day so they can leave comments like this.

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@Biladsan

Some people don't like how certain things are translated, don't like how a certain translator writes things out, etc.

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@Biladsan In this case, I assume because a lot of people can't stand CGRascal's low quality translations

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This is less of a rewrite and more of an edited (or final/beta-read) translation since this "rewrite" is based off of a translation.

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You've clearly never read a CGRascal "translation" then since what they do is more like "stick things in Google Translate and call it a day".

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I fully support your efforts, rewriter.

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I look foward to the next chapters, bro.

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Good luck with this, though you have the ignorant moron taggers of the site against you (same fucks who label anything starring a girl who has less than C cups lolicon)

Next time do not put rewrite in your title or anything close to it.

@Anime Janai: There's no other way to re-do the existing gallery without the original uploader doing so (CGRascal in this case), and knowing who that is, I doubt he'd actually go and do it.

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I fully approve of any rewrite of CGRascals works. Keep the up the good work. I wish CGRascal would get a clue and take more time with the translations or quit altogether.

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So, from now on, if someone doesn't like a translation, they can take that translation, re-edit it (not re-translate it) and submit that as a new gallery? Since this gallery continues to exist, that implies "re-edit" is a valid submission category.

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@Anime Janai

Fuck off with that slippery slope bullshit. Everyone knows CGRascal produces 100% garbage that doesn't even qualify as a translation. Someone willing to do a re-edit of that incomprehensible gibberish is a gentleman who deserves legitimate props, not asspained bitching.

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