Was expecting a bit more build up but ok.

Base +10, Driuz +8, Vongola Primo +6, OtterPoptart +4, Bookrat15 +5

I know this Comic from it's drawer. He nerver really finished it. He does now draw yaoi.

But if you wanna have "more built up" try to find his profile and read his other Comic.

And I would look at the artwork as well. That is all created nicely with a Grafic Tablet. It is a bunch of work to do a whole comic. For this comic the artist sure needed about two weeks I guess. So... for such a nice artwork, Plot is not that important. (Caus at least you just fap anyways, bro. But to be honest. I as well like it much more, if a Hentai has a good and nice story. I suggest you, to READ some pokemon Pr0n stories then. best website for this is furaffinity.net.

I am even an NSFW writer myself. I created an Nsfw story as well.

Just check my profile. And search for user karitas94

Base +7, wololf500 +4, mr_smiley -2

honestly this would have been a better story with no text.

Base +9, qpwoeiruty +11, Vongola Primo +6, OtterPoptart +4, TITSorGTFO +6

Seems a bit juvenile...

Base +10, qpwoeiruty +11, qqq2 +9, Vongola Primo +6, OtterPoptart +4

well that escalated quickly...

Base +13, Vongola Primo +6, OtterPoptart +4, Rinnosuke M. +17, TheGreatWolfSol +2