The editor of this doujin wasn't satisfied with the original edit, as it was rushed due to time constraints. This version fixed few of the dialogues to have better grammar and to be closer to the original story (As if it wasn't before...).
Hope you guys enjoy this version a bit more~
Maririn's FA post: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/13363996/ Original story: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/12695030/ Editor: http://www.furaffinity.net/user/thelazykid1912/