"Your so tastey Mom"
Illiterate garbage.

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Please do not debase The Amanoja9 with rewrites or edits.

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Now, I was already offended that you posted this in the first place. But I went and checked, and it occurred to me you took something that's been translated for YEARS and decided you could improve upon it with terrible writing, terrible grammar, and terrible editing. I was further flabbergasted by the fact that this actually cuts to AN ENTIRELY UNRELATED story at the end.

What the fuck were you even doing here?

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The letter u isn't a word.

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I don't oppose re-writes. I just think you should spend sometime with it. Make sure you use word perfect or microsoft word. Intentionally making bad grammar is seen as an intentional insult to the readers. So please do not do it again.

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I don't hate rewrites as much as other people and even defended the other Amanoja rewrite a while back but man, at least have SOME semblance of writing if you do it :

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The original is...?

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please stop, for the love of god please stop

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Original - /s/a741dcf354/85821-94

English [SaHa] - /s/b4d74b2279/198492-94

Spanish - /s/04467573c2/348378-94

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a very nice one.

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You know, I was actually kind of fond of the Shemale Incest Story rewrite. This is... just bad.

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I hope u do more where he started to crossdressing

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