Commissioned by Soothingkiwi

Translated by Rinruririn
Edited by Erokiwi

No golden goal? What's FIFA doing?

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You could see the end coming, but I actually would have preferred if one of the sisters ended up being freed and condemning the other.

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Such a predictable ending.

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But why comic sans?

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For some reason I like that sisters almost never look alike so there is variety in harems.
Also the story is fine

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Like rig vote in every gameshow, I should know that.

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You made a blog so people can commission you to commission translators so that you can violate artists' works with Comic Sans?

And of course this abomination has a 4.63 star rating, because why wouldn't it?

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sorry but this was my first time editing the translation script onto the images
and honestly I prefer commissioning desudesu for the translations since he does the translations and editing
I didn't know Rinruririn didn't do the editings
sorry people
Which font was supposed to be used anyway?

If you people know some good translators that also edit and take commissions please tell me

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Oh ! What a surprise ! The two sisters can't escape !

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This kind of editing is atrocious, and so old school. You could've looked for editing tutorials in the forum or somewhere else.

Sad thing is that, people are going to eat this up.

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hey i'm not editing ever again, so don't worry

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Not telling you to not consider editing again, but at least learn the basics.

The translation (that you paid for) is already there, what's left is a passable edit. You could save a lot of money by doing the editing yourself.

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Editing aside, this doesn't hold a candle to Yayo's other sex machine work, especially the ending.
Which is a shame, because this and that are the only machine stuff he's done...

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@Soothingkiwi

First of all, thank you for commissioning this and bringing it to us.

Now for font, many people choose Wild Words. It's pretty fitting for most comics in general, and doujins certainly aren't an exception. Try it out.
Even if you ultimately decide to stick with Comic Sans, at least switch to writing in all capital letters. Check other good translations; you'll notice that ALLCAPS is a common denominator.

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Yeah, Wild Words for font and use center alignment for the text. Also don't be afraid to put words on a new line; your typesetting needs some work.

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@Soothingkiwi:sorry to bother you, but by controlling the original work (in Japanese) I noticed that missing 6 pages, you may complete the work please.

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this art work http://www.dlsite.com/books/work/=/product_id/BJ100951.html

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Someone commissioned more artwork for the younger sister from the artist on Skeb too lol
https://skeb.jp/@Yayo_re/works/5

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