RAW - /g/606232/753d5855ba/?p=4
Actual [Original] Translation - /g/91894/e082cdd73b/

Enjoy! Hope I did I well as I tried.

Happy ending, I guess?

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Fucking Japan...

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....they go on about how her nipples were rubbing against her shirt from the start of the race....

while it is supposed to be sexy, this ignores the rather real problem with that...rough shirt material and built up salt from dried sweat....it is basically like a brillo pad. Rubbing and rubbing

Basically, if this was more realistic, this would need the guro tag.

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@ Iemeres I never really thought of that... that'd be a gruesome deconstruction if it got made.

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Steven King thought he was disappointed in what they did with The Lawnmower Man, what until he sees what they did with The Long Walk...

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"Underwear! Your services are no longer required!"
"Yes sir!"

That killed me.

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I know what this is supposed to say because it's been translated before, but this is now canon.

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this seems like a rewrite
(but if it is this is fucking hilarious)

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"Seems legit."

This is perfect. XD

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Thanks for rewrtiting my translate. Frankly, it sounds better than my translation because I tried so hard to stick to the Japanese. BTW, she doesn't want just ice cream, she wants Haagen Dazs!

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This entire rewrite is hysterical, you seriously need to make more.

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@ bewbs666 Thanks and thank you. Without your translation, I wouldn't have been able to make this because I can't read Japanese.

I knew I forgot something when making this, and that the was the brand of ice cream. Oh well...

@ marx2600 Haha Thanks. I sorta made this on a whim. I looked around some since I posted this and it looks like rewrites aren't very popular on the site. Glad mine's doing good though. If I see one that catches my eye, I'll might make another.

Last edited on 11 June 2016, 00:44.

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Track field check.
All young woman competing check.
Boobs & Spat check.
Guy enter track field to have there way with a young woman who stop run (only happen in japan) umm huge check.
Boner check.

You are good to go.

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