I will start with the warning, i'm NOT a native english speaker so this is going to have mistakes and maybe hurts your eyes XD.

This is literally my first time translating and editing manga so i welcome any observations and suggestions.
To have a better quality in this work and my next projects (2-3 chapters by month), i would like to ask if anyone is interested to help me with the english script (review the translation, check for mistakes and edit it so it sounds more natural), if you are interested please send me a PM.

I will fix the mistakes as soon as there is someone to help me.

The raw: /g/705395/1577392d44/
(The images are small because, sorry about that nothing much i can do about it)

At last, i am learning japanese so if any experienced translator can review this work and look for bad translations (there must be a lot), even if it's just 1 sentence that could have a better translation (Send me a PM with an explanation please) it would mean a lot for me, thanks in advance.

I've seen 18+ Gamer-type stories before, but this is the next level...

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Despite the bad English, this is a cute work. I'm sure if you find an editor you can get better

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@jhenier13 If you want me to proofread the scripts for you I can. A lot of what you translated just needs to be cleaned up a bit

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Thank you for the tl

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Good drawing style = Checked.
Sexy female = Checked.
Odd storyline = Checked.
Cute baby in the ending panel = Priceless.

Total = Kawai H work.

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This was good for the soul.

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And here I thought her two extra week spots were going to be Monday and Friday.

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that baby gave me diabetes it was that damn cute

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@ jhenier13
I posted on your other translation some thing I noticed this one seems to be a much better improvement. I only noticed one thing that caught my eye without being overly nitpicky.

page 13
then I don't will be able to stop
Try "then I won't be able to stop"

other then that just be careful of your homophones such as weak and week.

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.... good Lord I think I'm gonna need insulin for me and my dong after that.

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Most translators aren't actually native english speakers as far as I know so you don't have to worry about that.
English is rather wet behind the ears but I for one am glad I can enjoy the context of the stories at all.
Keep it up and take in the constructive criticism of the people here and there.
Man, newbie translators are popping up one after another, has the golden age of H translation finally come?

Now on the doujin topic
Sweet Dear lord so sweet. Odd yet sweet.

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From rape to marriage in a few simple steps, i'm impressed. Thanks for translation, if it's about mistakes, the only one i noticed is the same as @red death68 pointed out, other than that i find it satisfactory.

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First that tsugumi nisekoi doujin now this?
Oh god we really should have a wedding dress tag

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^There already is one. female:bride
I made a gallery dedicated to it. If anyone is interested, just click on my username. It just sucks that you can't add complete doujin or Manga chapters to Image Collections for some reason.

I really digged the Dragon Quest style speech bubbles here. Didn't see that before.
And that baby at the end made me "Hnngghh".

The artist is really good at making cute stories. Here's a childhood friend Gyaru by him:
/g/793194/bc62c0703c/

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That's some dangerous case of Tetris effect.

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Thank you for your hard work. Although this translation does have its flaws, I am glad to see all the positive feedback and offers for help you are getting. We can always use another translator out there, especially one who is willing to work with others on learning how to improve.

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That baby is wearing quite a tsundere expression.

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