everybody want in english i did it, and i finished this ( sorry for take a time i watched ONE PUNCH MAN and now i am addict ^^)
i dont do the translate i just paste this on paint original translate here https://e621.net/pool/show/4377
so i hope you like my (very) litlle work

i will post a animal crossing story (in english) and a other pokemon doujin (surprise!) so have a good reading ^^

PS sorry for my bad english i am french and i will post the same manga in french maybe

Did you write while at school?

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no ^^ if i am caught i am so dead
but why this question?
it's turn you on? (french joke)

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/g/852371/ab1bf51300/
this is original

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I'm not trying to be negative here, but surely you have some plain white paper laying around?

Edit: no, I was just trying to offer some constructive criticism.

Last edited on 05 January 2016, 19:13.

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yeah you right. next time would be better. but not now because i finished the outline and i am writting the text.
so i am sorry and it will be better on the next doujin (i cant tell you it's a surprise) i promise ^^
is that so disturbing?

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I am strangely reminded of blue pikachu.

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someone explain me the end i don"t understood ^^

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Good comic, but something about crayon on notebook paper feels like it was drawn in the back of a high school algebra class. Like I imagine that you had an actually binder of these, that was stored somewhere, and that if the location were ever leaked all hell would break loose.

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Read a little further, realized you speak french and decide to draw more sex scenes than double your average doujin in english, hold the W (win) op it was made for you.

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Art is fantastic, skill wise. Subject matter is not to my taste. If it was humans or moemon, though...

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what do you want next?
animal crossing story (in english of course)
or a other pokemon doujin? (in english too)

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Please dud i'm french too translate it in french come on please!

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That typesetting
On a more serious note, I wonder how I ended up here

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This is a doujin not a western work, /g/826045/b11a58cdce/ the original and /g/852371/ab1bf51300/ the coloured version this is based on.

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please make another pokemon doujin... maybe somehow involve braixen

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Are you on DeviantArt

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I think page 21 is missing

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