Lil dicey grammar, and censoring at the end?

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Why do the panels seem out of order?

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this artist always get posted out of order...
I really like the art style, but the grammar and even the panel placement at times gave me a migraine.

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That's the problem... I really aprecciate that a lot of persons tell me that I have a lot of spelling mistakes.... But they never tell me... WHERE THE MISTAKES ARE.... So. How I'm gonna learn if you don't tell me. Conclusion: Thanks for giving me your opinion, but please help me with that.

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It's not our job to teach you the English language. There are many, many mistakes, too many to point out. Pay attention in school, or don't try writing in english.

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You realize the author might be English as a Second Language then, right?

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I'd love to see this finished!

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Eh, I'll help with the first page or so, because I have some sort of compulsion to elucidate.

First sentence should be, "It's been a long time since my Aunt sent me a present" or "My Aunt's present should be here soon" depending on if she knows about the present in advance.

Mind your capitalization, and be careful about the pointless detail- no mailman is going to say "the package is from X, Y, Z" because it's printed on the box, and they have to deliver hundreds of boxes.

Page 2- English isn't an assumption-friendly language. You need to make it clear that she's reading a letter, "Oh, a card. So... it says this thing will make me feel like a woman, huh?" would work. Again, the idea is to streamline information while also giving out what's needed, all the while making it feel natural.

P3- Mostly good- the 2nd and 3rd panels need some work, though; all light is 3d, so adding a more relevant description would be best. So like, "crazy light show" or something, you have a lot of options.

The 3rd panel cuts a sentence in half with a period; one sentence = one thought. If you need two thoughts in one sentence you can use a semicolon, but that's fairly advanced stuff.

And again, mind your capitalization; capitals go at the start of each new sentence and on the first letter of "proper nouns" (names mostly).

P4- Caps. Also, native English speakers use "can't" instead of "can not" and "isn't" in place of "is not". Those are "contractions" and are shortenings of common word combinations. Native English speakers are lazy, and we use those just about whenever we can.

So that covers most of what was wrong, and hopefully you can work with that to get better than most native speakers; their sheer disdain for the semicolon is just disgusting. :P

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Curious about artist...

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