i can't continue to work with this series unless someone help me with editing and typewrite it.. if anyone interested, contact me at the forum or reply this gallery. we'll be doing page per page tho, so you can't ditch the work after i finished translating all the pages.
also, i tweaked mai senpai's body so she is not miserably anorexic anymore

Last edited on 29 April 2016, 12:02.

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Point 1: You might want a proof reader to check the text. Or even just paste it in Word beforehand and use the spellcheck. There are some typos (mastubate, sideway / sideways, place / places, ...) and the structure of some sentences could use some improvement (Why did you strip all your clothes to the underwear). And pre- and suffixes generally have a dash in them. (Mai senpai / Mai-senpai, Ero Hiko / Ero-Hiko, Ichijou kun / Ichijou-kun)

Point 2: The original has slightly transparent speechbubbles, you might want to mimic that with yours. Also, the text color you've used is a tad too vibrant compared to the original. You might want to use a darker shade.

Nothing too bad so far. That said...

Point 3; Editing the original content to suit your own taste. Yeahhh, that is generally a nono. Even assuming people do prefer it this way (unlikely), you might want to make that more clear in the title and tags. Similarly to how colorizations and nude filters are handled. Putting it in the last sentence of the description is a bit iffy.

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i did this between my busy schedule, if there's any editor who want to help and post the original content, they are very welcomed. and english is not my first language and i live alone in the basement so...

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Any chance this can be finished?

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Art 6. Plot 6. Sexiness 6. Translation 4. True to character 5. All out of 10.

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