A update fixing (most of) the language issues

Thanks, more translated Koh material is always welcome! Edit: yikes, really should get a native English speaker to go over the script.

Last edited on 19 May 2016, 13:17.

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Hello everyone, second translation I make, and I wanted this hentai in particuliar (guys comic Koh rocks AF ), and this time I translated it with the help of Tchena. Without her I won't be able to proper translate so give her a huge thumb up guys. Have a nice fap !
Edit: Yep I know that english isn't my main & native language and that I suck in writting it, I'm still learning btw , and so if you guys want to proof read it (native speaker only of course) contact me, I would really appreciate it. And the update fixing the issues w/ the languages is coming

Last edited on 19 May 2016, 16:40.

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Hello guys, hope you'll enjoy our work :)

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This is awesome!

thank you both, Elixir974 and Tchena.

you guys rock!!

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The art is quite good but I think the translation and editing needs a little more of work...

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The help of Tchena didn't do much, this is on the same level as your last translation:

page 1: "where did your horses from earlier went"
page 4: "do you recovered"
page 6: "kotomi won't give in those things", "there really ain't no damage at your head"
page 7: "stirring the glan using her tongue"
page 9: "[...]you're not putting any resistance at all"
page 12: "[...] you did it overkill"
page 14: "It surprisely and easily entered in, despite you're pushing back", "[...] you want us to fuck you more that it's"
page 15: "[...] just expriming [...]" - is expriming even an english word?

Using an english dictionary might help. Or working with someone who actually speaks english.

FFS man, i still can't fap to this.

Last edited on 18 May 2016, 19:21.

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I appreciate your job, but please, make an update fixing the issues with the language.
It was a great doujin too.

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Thanks for the translation. As for some potential ideas for improvement:
1. Capitalize all names and beginning of sentences
2. Ask a couple more people to proofread it for you; many people here would be glad to do that
3. Aesthetic thing, but another font may make it look better

Edit: Huh, looks like things are cleaning up quite nicely. Thanks for taking the time to go back and edit it.

Last edited on 26 May 2016, 18:05.

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Wash bucket and towel on the last page. Nice move guys :)

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The tale of the rise of a semon demon.

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Slutty introvert story: origins.

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I mean, thanks and all but...the vast majority of sentences are fucked up. Might want an editor that's actually fluent in English.

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Reverse rape is best.

You did it overkill, tho

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Loved the comic, and even has my name on it, perfect. (?)

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Learn English before you start putting words on paper.

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Needs a sequel.

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@Elixir974: As someone who hates it when people with poor grammar try to translate things I can appreciate your effort with this. You recognize that as a non-native speaker of english your grammar isn't the best and you actively seek editorial help. This is already much better than some other translators out there who refuse to accept criticism. Keep up the effort and you'll get to a decent translation point eventually.

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At least, the story being very hilarious saves the translation from being a complete trainwreck, yet I can't but follow the other recommendations of getting someone better at English to proofread next time.

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