also pg 02, "I don't know if was because" should be "if it was" pg 12, "cearly" should be "clearly" pg 15, "wierd" should be "weird" (is misspelled twice) pg 17 "Looks like normal movement no issues either" should be "movements have no issues either" pg 23 "start moving" should be "started moving" pg 33 "bodeis" should be "bodies". and "You played as me played" should be a comma, "you played as me, played" pg 36 "I told you, you won't understand" should be "wouldn't". and "But your so sly" should be "you are so sly" pg 44, "Because if was I wasn't there" should be "Because if I wasn't there" (has "was" twice). "It was a patch up this missing thing?" (I have no idea about this sentence).
pg 17 "Looks like normal movement no issues either" I misspoke, should be "have" not "has". pg 23, "My limbs move on their own like long before move all on their own" I am not sure what to make of this sentence. pg 34, "What are you planning to do" should be "were you planning"
pg 42, "If it were really Maya" should be "was" not were. Some of the sentences are a bit weird but seems passable. I suggest to get help from 4chan /a/ in the Kancolle thread or from Yuriproject board for QC. If you can.
Base +6, fjdkslaa -6
Posted on 11 September 2016, 03:41 by: melancholica