i'm not who makes the edition

-Little_wolf: the other day i came across the original sketches on this comic.

that comic gave me nightmares (TBH) so i propose the idea of re-writing comic and reintroduce the the discarded panels, and make it similar to the original sketches.

i can handle the speech bubbles and text but we need someone skillful to edit the pages using PS.

https://u18chan.com/board/u18chan/c/topic/1131743#1131743

Not bad. I'd like to see more.

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Onoing? Wasn't this done a little while ago?

EDIT: Nvm. Just noticed it was a re-write.

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Hardly a re-write if you ask me. The only thing really different was the first page about the gangbangs and stuff. Other than that, you just tweaked the grammar slightly and sometimes, for the worse.

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yeah i wondered what gave him nightmares? it seems to be almost the same as the original

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This didn't need to exist

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the one out now was ok but this ugh it didnt need to be shown

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@Chronic The Hemphog
many peapole hate sam's dialoge and the blackmail undertone, so the >>>Little_wolf's idea is make sam's charater less douchebaggery.
And reintroduce the discarded panels, and make it similar to the original sketches.

@kashiri
just wait for more upload

@robertsaltin
why?

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a little shift in the plot

-Little_wolf:

page 7

a little heavy on exposition :/ this page and the next will put context on the whole situation with Sam.

yes in the original he was invited, but i tried easing in his presence because Chelsea planned the whole for a good reason (something to do with her cousin).

also no blackmail undertone :)

your thoughts?

Last edited on 22 August 2016, 16:02.

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@Lordworgen because it completely changes the artist original intent without improving the overall work. It also is such a small change until the random panels are thrown it that it's practically a duplicate. If you didn't like the original that's fine, but don't try to act better than the true artist and change their work

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"Rewrites" are just a way for people with no talent at either writing or art to pretend they made something.

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edit, i was wrong

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@robertsaltin for the last time, i'm not who made the edition, i just uploaded here; anyway

many peaple paid for the original comic, and they felt uncomfortable with the results. it's reasonable that someone wants a better vercion

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page 8

the continuation of the exposition of the things Chelsea know about, it's now revealed that Chelsea invited Sam to distract her whorish cousin away from her dad.

she got a little jealous :P

thoughts?
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also the last panel is done.

Last edited on 22 August 2016, 22:49.

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really nice stuff, please continue working on it

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It'll take more than a rewrite to un-cuck this terrible book.

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(completed)

Little_wolf :P
page 9

we are getting closer to the end :)

minor edits

fixed missing text
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Little_wolf :P

page 12
there was some negative space at the bottom, i had to fill it with something :/
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Little_wolf :P
page 13! i'm done (9 ^o^)9
Dane got mad... his poor ego ( >_<)

typo fixed ^_^

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>completed
But I want moooore D:

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Why is Adam Wan always such a drama magnet? I am glad I got out of furry when I did.

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Well.... My opinion, less wierd and a slap in the face with cuck so I liked that... But not much of a difference, it ties with the other, and I agree the original was good and creepy

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i uploaded the original sketches with the discarded panels, just for make comparison with the pages 11 and 12, in my opinion Little_wolf :P made a nice work with the ps

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I can honestly say I find this more enjoyable than the original, less asshole characters and more fun.

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I really enjoyed this more. I hated the original dialog between both males.... It gave the comic a more light feeling, and I really approve!

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Most of the NTR bullshit gone? Thank you, sir with some degree of self respect

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Not nearly as good as the original.

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The characters are STILL douchebags, though. It's still not light. Even with the gay stuff, the characters are locked into codependent, mentally unstable relationships that kill the mood, making it still feel like toned-down rape. God, furry cartoonists seriously need to drop the dialogue and the pathetic attempts at story. It just comes across as incredibly emo. "Samael" is supposed to be the name of some angel or demon or whatever--this tryhard fourth wheel nobody invited really drains the action. He comes across as someone's Mary Sue self-insert character. And the wife is just pants-on-head retarded.

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i like the extra pannels

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@ robertsaltin
A lot of people found the dialog in the original was too... weird. Like everyone's too much of a jerk. This tones it down a bit. Not much... but a bit.

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i would have liked this more without the fox character taking over the comic

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It was a good edit, it made the characters a bit more sympathetic and just out to have a fun weekend instead of racing to see who stabs who in the back first.

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arent technically both girls, his daughters?

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I like this version of the story. Thanks.

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Need More of this Artist my friends. Thanks.

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Art 7. Plot 7. Sexiness 6. English 7. All out of 10.

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not averse to the concept of a rewrite. I AM averse to very... Very poor dialogue.

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