another manga i did rewrite couple of weeks ago
hope you enjoy and again feel free to comment negative
and positive insights about it,thank you! :D

Glad to see that your eager to contribute to this community...

Constructive criticism:
If you don’t have a proof reader, try to check grammatical errors with grammar software Microsoft word (it is not the only one) is one of them but there are free software available. You can use google translate to check in your dominant language if the sentence word makes sense and last but not least you can ask help from fellow e-hentai users or even ask help from the Pros I bet there willing to help too.

Thanks for the share!

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@Ooe Kintarou noted thank you and i'll work on my grammar the next time i rewrite :)

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I am a little bit confused. Is this a "rewrite" like "I don't know the original language and made the dialogues up myself" or are you just not confident enough in your skill and you called your "translation" a rewrite?

I personally don't care about mistakes, so thanks for your effort. I just want to know if this is close to the original story or if it is made up dialogues.

Base +6, shinangels +18, Vanilla Cream +5, vxo +6, Hyoros +7, ChillRa +6

1) Rewrites are totally useless.
2) This is unreadable.
3) Literally everything is wrong.

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I don't know who is shitting out these translations, but instead of quantity, maybe work on quality instead?

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Your very focused on the fact its a re-write huh, Like you know whats up and how hated re-writes are here yet proudly place it in the title of all the works you've done with your name right next to it and are are focused on negative comments. Your heading down a really bad path man. If you want to do re-writes that's up to you I can't agree with it and think you should stop, but your free to do what you want,

However please take this advice.

Only re-write things that are at least six years old or already have a translation. If you're trying to turn translator older works are great to start on and if they have a translation you can compare after your done. If your doing re-writes just to write your own story of for fun doing newer work kills the chance of them actually getting translated so this is just a nice thing to do so you don't seem like your trying to be mean.

Also you stated that you can translate other languages. That's cool but don't do a translation of a translation if your being serous. Too many times through the process and it makes it bad. Instead why don't you find work that is in those languages and translate them. I know of a few spanish and portuguese hentais that I would love to read!

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When this is a rewrite, where is the original?

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That mother fucker...

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original /s/98ee10eaa1/846138-161

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English translation: /g/1524574/87d84036c1/

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