My first attempt at translating a doujinshi. (Despite my name here, NebulaVista is what I usually go by). I tried keeping it as close to the original as possible without making it sound too awkward. I'm sorry if there were any mistakes.

If you have any questions/feedback please feel free to let me know.

Original: /g/982219/e7c9d7abf3/

Small nitpick, but wasn't Toriel pissed at Asgore because he didn't have the courage to go out and harvest all the souls he needed at once? He felt so guilty that he only killed children when they came to him, prolonging the suffering of the monsters?

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I absolutely loathe Undertale, but this was very cute.

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So this is personified goat sex. Interesting.

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illegalcheese > No, she was pissed because he declared war on humans and started collecting souls.

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@Illegalcheese, she hated him because 5 of the 6 children didnt need to die at all. He only needed one to cross the barrier.

Remember, the SOUL persists after death. He could have just gone to ANY graveyard on earth and got them.

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@illegalcheese

She was angry with him because he only needed one soul to cross the barrier (which... was not enough for Asgore purpose of destroying the barrier, so Toriel kinda got mad for wrong reason there) and being "coward" for not killing the humans themselves.

I don't think it is impossible for two to reconcile, especially because Toriel is equally a coward. She abandons Asgore, who at the moment had been in fits of anger for loss of TWO of his children (Chara and Asriel, and there is very clear evidence that Deemurs did truly love Chara and s/he did love them back).

So basically, when Asgore needed someone to rein him in, she abandoned him and refused to talk to him. This left Asgore with no-one who could tell him he was wrong, even if he knew it, so he went with what people wanted: goal for freedom.

Equally, Toriel knew what was happening... yet didn't actually stop any humans from leaving the ruins. She could have left with them, protected them and tried to reason. Instead, she chose to hide in Ruins and pretend to be this smart and wise, when in reality she didn't want to face the crowd that was dishearten and needed SOMETHING to keep their hopes up.

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Make sure you center align your text next time, otherwise a solid job on the typesetting.

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Thanks for some more translated Yoo Oona. Worth an ask, but do you take requests or commissions?

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@NeitherMyName
Wasn't Toriel mad because Asgore just needed one soul to cross the barrier and then he himself could've collected the human's souIs?
Instead he waited for humans to fall, die on their own and then collect their souls.
She was mad at him for not wanting to dirty his own hands.

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@ScowlingMask
I haven't really thought about doing commissions as of yet. I'm still a beginner when it comes to Japanese, meaning that translating takes a while for me. As an example, this doujin took around two weeks for me to complete (although to be fair, I was working on it on and off). I guess lot of it really depends on what needs to be translated.

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@NeitherMyName
Couldn't have said it better myself, and this will continue to be one of my favorite undertale smut comics

@NeitherMyName
Man this is exactly why this is the only good undertale smut comic. It feels like the proper ending for how this should go: with toriel and asgore reconciling things before slowly making up. It's a good doujin that feels good to read as well as fap to.

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As someone who longed for reconciliation between Toriel and Asgore, I found the dialogue bewteen these two to be rather wonderful. It was also good to see Toriel admit that while Asgore was, indeed, at fault, she made her own share of mistakes...and, like herself, she can see that Asgore's making up for them.

When I fave a comic on a smut site for the romance and fluff even more than I do for the sexual content, you know you've done something special. Well done!

As someone who longed for reconciliation between Toriel and Asgore, I found the dialogue bewteen these two to be rather wonderful. It was also good to see Toriel admit that while Asgore was, indeed, at fault, she made her own share of mistakes...and, like herself, she can see that Asgore's making up for them.

When I fave a comic on a smut site for the romance and fluff even more than I do for the sexual content, you know you've done something special. Well done!

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