It's me again! Back with Chapter 3 this time. I do hope the lighting has improved as Chapter 2 looked bleached. As always, do leave your feedback and thanks again guys.

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I like what you did on the new comic. The lighting is improved and the character models are well defined; however, there are a few problems that I noticed and I will tell you that at the end. The atmosphere in the story is well done and put the heroes in a very perilous state when facing their enemies. The corrupted characters are quite scary as well with all the horns and skin color and the transforming smoke around them is pretty cool. The issue that I have is that the penis (something I am hesitant to call it due to design) and the nipples in some of the characters look more plastic looking than I would have liked such as on page 123, 125, 126 and so on. I'm not sure if that is intentional, but it looks something more of a plastic bimbo futa sex doll transformation than a evil corrupting transformation. I would also advise that you be slightly more careful on the sizes of the breasts not because it looks bad since it is a character transforming into something sexy and hot, but it must fit the premise of being alluring to other characters that will join them as well. My suggestion is that the character models created by H3Ncomics, G9comics, Genyun, and JohnGate2014 to give you inspiration on what sort of characters you actually want to create to send a message to your audience. Aside from the slightly jarring plastic look on the character models, I think you done an excellent job on your latest work and keep up the good work. I look forward to your next comic issue.

Edit: Please note that the penises on 123 and 145 looks more like peppershakers to me. That's the first thing that comes into mind.

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*Look who's evil now* plays...

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@Unknown Guy

Thanks for taking the time to write this feedback. As for the intention of turning them into futa sex dolls... That was not the intention, however the inspiration for such character designs are more leaned towards artist like squarepeg3d and its vastly different from what the other corruption content creators are doing. Though the proportions are exaggerated, it is kinda what I envisioned for the character in CA to look like, though I might have overtuned them... (which is why the new characters have body frames more in line with Shinra/g9). As for some of the parts looking more plastic than the others I think I reduced their texture sizes to be too small and I would take note of that in the next release.

Maybe its time to get my own version of mpgrey hmmm.

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@Verinis

You could probably just reach out to him.

Edit: I am partial to the idea of retractable penises, only appearing when needed.

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All I have to say is that the 3rd one started regressing into what I can only call the main issue with all 3D works.
Lots and lots of talking and fighting, very little actual porn.
And yes, while there were plenty of sex scenes, I wouldn't call them as thematical as the previous works. Actual corruption wasn't quite at work here.

Still, cool stuff.

EDIT:
'Figured I didn't make it explicit enough by what I meant, so I'll use the last few pages as an example:
One of em' made a deal with a sudden demon, sprouted out of the ground, and then instantly turned a fellow devotee into a thrall. That's neither exciting nor pleasing to see. Are these people truly so trivial, that they can be goofed around like that? Even by a major demon? That's not really fun. And in the start of the chapter, the girl who got captured was corrupted in the background. No narration about her personal experiences were conveyed, it just sort of happened, and they had sex.

As a porn about becoming a demon, you'd think that becoming a demon would be much more significant. That you'd have to REALLY fuck the shit out of them in order to turn them. But instead, it goes on a bargain sale, and it happens to random nobodies. There's very little struggle, and as a result there's very little meaning to it.
Also, just throwing it out there, giving one of the girls a dick doesn't quite make it seem like they've fallen even deeper to depravity.

It may be a bit late at this point, but honestly, what I'd like out of corruption stories, is to establish main characters, and pit friend versus friend to give the reader a sense of loss. You do care much more for people you know, rather than randos that keep on spawning on every new chapter.
The corruption process should also not be...As instant, unless you also narrate the transformation and its meaning, how it gets into their head and why they'd accept it.
Further more, fucking should always carry corruption with it. Nobody just fucks to have sex, but to spread the virus around, or to further their depravity. The act of sex carries their choice to join the other side, and as such should reflect it.

That's about all the info dump I can dish out as a consumer, if you find any use for it.

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Would love to see more and bigger piercings on either the tits or pussies of those demonesses, maybe enlargin their nipples and pussies, or tentacles coming out of their enlarged nipples to make them look more depraved like demons I do agree the corruption should be a more prolonged and meaninful, those are just some suggestions but i love your awesome work and keep up thee good stuff

Edit: Here are some examples of what I mean:

https://i.*****.net/galleries/1454028/17.jpg

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this is most refreshing corruption content and done right might i add keep up the great work i look forward to reading more of this series.

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@Solipsist

Thank you so much for taking the time to write such an in-depth feedback. Regarding the concept of corruption being weak in this chapter, I realized that people may think the corruption is too fast or that the story does not justify their fast corruption. The intent was only to elaborate on the Archangel this chapter (hence the title), everything else was to build up for the next chapter & introduce the fodder characters. I do agree the story should have been structured better so the transitions/corruptions are smoother and more pleasing which is why I have made plans to fix that issue in part 4 by working with someone else, since, clearly storytelling has never been my strongest suit.

Thanks everyone again for reading.

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@Verinis
o7
Also, what you wrote reminded me of how Dinaranger used to be released; 2 chapters would release together, and often, 1 chapter would be pure exposition, and the 2nd one would make full use of it.
Neat stuff.

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@Verinis
When will the next issue be out?

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@greatlakes100

It's more than 50% done, maybe a month or two? (Hopefully). Do check out my social media for previews : D

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