I stole most of this but I feel it should exist in it's totality and give credit to the others. Also I'd like to think the typesetting I did on this is way better than previous works.
Yeah, the typesetting has significantly improved from your last work. Keep it up dude :)
You should change the font you use though, comic sans just isn't a good choice. You should download the font pack from here and play around with it: https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/type/fonts.html