Hi everyone, this Raymond, long time no see!

Here it comes the second translated hentai manga by me, hope you guys can enjoy it!

My previous translated manga:

[Semakute Kurai (Kyouan)] Groman-ka Club 1 [English]
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RAW: /g/1560264/8837e44219/

Shamelessly copied comment from klermun:

Unfortunately you fell for the newbie trap and used the 1280x resolution resample pages for editing instead of the original raw which is around ~1505 x 2125. For gallery viewing, e-hentai downsamples all images to 1280x resolution so if you downloaded the pages without using the original source link, you got the reduced version instead.

Another possibility is that you downloaded the raw from one of the aggregator sites such as NH. These sites only copy galleries from e-hentai at resample quality and thus don't have the original resolution versions available. You shouldn't use these sites as a source for your raws.

Always check that you're using the original raw before you start editing. If you ever see the resolution being 1280x something, then most of the time that means something is wrong and you got the wrong version.

Here's some ways you can download the original full resolution version of any gallery on e-hentai:
1) Torrent download if a torrent is available. Avoid any torrents labeled 1280x though.
2) Click on Archive download and then Download Original Archive.
3) If you prefer to download one page at a time, make sure you download using the Download Original Source link located below each opened image in the gallery.

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@scumbini

Thanks for reminding me.
Sorry for the inconvenient caused guys......
I didn't think of this when translating, I will follow your suggestion and hope next time can bring better product to you guys.

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You should also try to get some proofreading in your TL.
2 pages in and I can already see some grammatical errors...

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@kmydream30

keep up the good work bro, less people who translated Tokyo Prominence Tomato even though their characters is good.

don't worry you're doing fine.

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I didn't comment on your previous release, but your stuff is filled with typos and awful grammar. Also, your translation is straight-up wrong in many places.

Your typesetting also requires work. Please see resources here: https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/

p.4 Worked here for 5 years. => "She has been working here for 5 years." She's still working there.
p.4 It seems like she dates with her boyfriend every weekend, though no one saw him before. => It seems like she goes on dates with her boyfriend every weekend, though no one has ever seen him.
p.5 That lewd body. I won't get forget it. => This is completely made-up. He says "Her body's/She's so lewd/hot, as always."
p.5 How come she can act [...] => Poor English, and also slightly wrong. What he says is: "I can't believe she's acting like that [like nothing's happening] even though she's getting fucked raw and creampied." He doesn't phrase it as a question, and you also omitted the 生ハメ part.
p.5 Argh - I wanna fuck til she's squirting. => Partly made-up. He says: "Aah. I wanna have sex with her until she goes crazy!" No mention of squirting anywhere. Also, it's 'til, not til.
p.6 [...] But I still don't get change to have BSM with her. => Wtf does this even mean? lmao
p.6 Yesterday, she got creampie for two times, I remembered. => "She was creampied twice yesterday, huh..."
p.6 Ahh... These lewd butts. => C'mon, man. "Aah... Her ass is so hot." ALT: "Aah... What a sexy butt." You get the idea.
p.6 Aww - she's certainly seducing me! Let me do it! => What he says: "Aaah, I'm absolutely going to do it/fuck her. She's definitely trying to seduce me"
p.7 Few days later, two of them both stay the office til night. => Broken English. "A few days later, just the two of them stayed late at the office!"
p.7 Yes, I'm here. Is there a problem? => ???. What she says: "Yes? What is it, Hino-san?"
p.7 It's already time to leave. => I'm going home [now].

I don't have the energy to go through the rest of the the doujin. This is just 4 pages worth. Honestly, I'm not sure why you rewrite half the sentences, especially when they're this simple.

I know this is only your 2nd release, but please, try to improve before continuing.

Last edited on 03 November 2021, 19:30.

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@cutegyaru

Thank you.
I tried to translate it as same as the original, but sometimes I really can't find any similar English wordings(I know it is my fault as my English is still not good enough), so I tried to replace it with something similar. You're right, I shouldn't rewrite the sentences. From now on, I will ask my partner more about how to convey the same meaning as much as possible.

Sorry for the rewrite, I really didn't mean to do it... it is just because of my bad English. I will improve it in the next translated comic.
Thank you again for the correction.

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Just mentioning her boyfriend is enough to count this at netorare?

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If your English is shit stop rewriting and then passing it as translation, or better don't "translate" at all. Last but not least, this is not NTR .

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What a simp... all that for a whore hundreds fucked before him.

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