Helloo! Itscalledpoundcake here, this is one of my first comics
i wanted to make slow burn feminization story so here it is, it'll span several chapters, i would love to hear your thoughts on it and what can be added or improved.

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Edit: Chapter 1 has been completely rewritten, thanks to all your constructive criticism.
I’ll keep the updates coming—stay tuned

Unless it's very necessary info, you don't want to start with an info dump about your characters. It's that whole "show don't tell" thing they tell new writers... You can put that stuff at the end for people who are interested.

English is a bit rough. Lot of its/it's confusion. "Fasten" doesn't mean "make quicker"; you want "hasten" for that. And conventionally, Japanese honorifics are attached with a hyphen, not standalone, e.g. "Kei-chan".

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I would say to get him into crossdressing maybe have th MC make an account of his crossdressing
It gets more lewd by how much people pay to see more

Then have him go into a bar to try alcohol & his only way to enter is show his chest to an unsuspecting bouncer.

It would get him more into it & love the thrill

Edit: 11-23-24
Dude the new cover is so good!! Definitely need an end page showing the old covers & one without chastity. Dang good

Last edited on 23 November 2024, 21:24.

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Ohhh slow burn feminization sound right up my alley. Will def keep a eye on it. :)

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@itscalledPoundcake
Is it cool unless it's too difficult to tell us all in an end page what was changed ?
Be cool, imma read it now
Love this series

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This keeps showing up with too-frequent single-page updates - now there's an update with no new pages at all? What changed?

Drinking beer makes you feel warm, by the way, not cool.

Last edited on 24 November 2024, 01:48.

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Unnecessary updates with repetitive pages almost identical that do not add anything to this story that loses pace and with it you lose continuity and the pleasure of reading... On the other hand... It's very exciting the idea of the gradual advance of Kei-Chan’s perversion and the hidden game of Taijo-Kun who has been fantasizing for months about the effeminate body of his friend Kei-Chan without him realizing that their friendship was based on Taijo’s hidden gay desires that Kei-Chan confuses with shyness with girls, and the predisposition to be a Sissy that was latent in Kei-Chan and that he goes discovering from the moment he first tried the sexy skirt that his friend made him to wear...

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A little boy

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instead of updating this only to add a page or two maybe wait until you have like, a lot of pages to add lol

This looks like something I wouldn't mind coming back to but I don't want to see it at the top of my watchlist every time there's a new camera angle

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Story looks promising, if i had to say something i would ask that you work a bit on the camera angles, for example, in page 66, it would be nice to have a POV perspective showing that ass, so that we know why the guy couldn't resist.
As for the plot, i really like some slow burn feminization, i just hope you keep on being a solo action for now, the other guy rubbed into the MC there but i hope you don't take things further than that anytime soon, let the MC find out things for himself, to slowly drown in pleasure, also some more masturbation scenes from him would be appreciated, now with just his dick but later with perhaps him touching his nipples or something.
Aside from that, i'm really looking forward to see more of this work

EDIT: already with the cage, i thought it would take longer, i mean, he only fapped to the crossdressing once after all...seems a bit too soon imo considering you said you wanted a slow burn

Last edited on 03 December 2024, 23:33.

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Definitely think he should use the cage alot less

The chastity cage is getting used alot.
Maybe as a oopsy he keeps it on & becomes sexually frustrated.
Brief till he wants that insane feeling again

I hope he goes out walking & sees how he gets free stuff, compliments, food. Etc
Using his looks for more, going into a club or getting a game that is "out of stock" till he flashes his "breasts"

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PG 102 have a repeated dialogue from page 97

Also, good thing he didn't just use the cage and kept it on, the more masturbation the better

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